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39 Responses

  1. Aves, on November 28th, 2006 at 5:39 pm Said:

    That is so good and creative!

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  2. Stephanie, on November 28th, 2006 at 6:57 pm Said:

    Ya! E.J. that was a great report, i really liked the problem with the “i broke a nail” it really put taste to the theme, if you know what i mean ( hehehe that rhymed):)
    -Stephanie P.4-

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  3. Gaby, on November 28th, 2006 at 7:42 pm Said:

    tegan i really liked your story it was funny

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  4. lesliemaus, on November 28th, 2006 at 8:48 pm Said:

    Hi everyone! Thanks so much for taking time to read and comment on others’ stories. It’s really fun to see your own work on the web, huh?

    Avery, you’ll have to be more specific in your comments to get credit. I don’t know which ones you read! I also don’t know what you thought was good and creative. Gaby, same for you! What did you like about Teagan’s story?

    Stephanie, very specific feedback for EJ, but could you explain what you mean about a taste to the theme?

    Great job to all of you who took the time necessary to find out how to attach a copy of your essay and to read your classmates’ essays.

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  5. Jack, on November 29th, 2006 at 7:03 pm Said:

    I think Gaby’s sounded like a real news story on t.v.

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  6. Jack, on November 29th, 2006 at 7:09 pm Said:

    I like how I felt the suspense of Teagan’s story as I was reading about the “bullies” wanting to be king.

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  7. Jack, on November 29th, 2006 at 7:16 pm Said:

    For E.j.’s story I think that it was funny that she broke a nail and all the king’s men laughed. It seems like the King’s men are sick of her.

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  8. Stephanie, on November 29th, 2006 at 8:12 pm Said:

    hey Teagen! that was a great story, i thought it was really creative…i couldn’t have ever came up with that. i especially liked how Humpty was put together by supper glue!
    Thanks
    Stephanie P.4

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  9. Stephanie, on November 29th, 2006 at 8:21 pm Said:

    hi Gabby, I just read your story and thought it was great! i really liked how you described the shotter as rotten…it ws really funny!:)
    thanks,
    Stephanie P.4

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  10. shane, on November 29th, 2006 at 9:18 pm Said:

    Hey Stephanie, I just read your story and it was great. I really liked your title it was interesting.
    good job,
    Shane Takabayashi

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  11. Neika, on November 29th, 2006 at 9:58 pm Said:

    Wow EJ great story i thought u were really discriptive and creative i liked the conflict I broke a nail that was hilarious!

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  12. laura, on November 29th, 2006 at 11:20 pm Said:

    I enjoyed reading Gaby’s story because it had many little details that you mixed in with terms you use for eggs!
    Laura P:3

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  13. laura, on November 29th, 2006 at 11:25 pm Said:

    Hello Teagan, I LOVED your interview with Humpty Dumpty’s sister and how you worded a lot of phrases!
    Laura per:3

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  14. laura, on November 29th, 2006 at 11:28 pm Said:

    I liked the way you used CSI in your story. I thought it added a little something extra to your story that nobody else ( that i have read) had.
    Laura P:3

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  15. Tori, on November 30th, 2006 at 5:49 pm Said:

    I think Teagans was very interesting and funny

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  16. Tori, on November 30th, 2006 at 5:55 pm Said:

    to cassie:
    like the puns!!!

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  17. mack, on November 30th, 2006 at 6:35 pm Said:

    E.J.-

    I liked how you’r story was like how the Humpty Dumpty ryme was made,creative!

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  18. mack, on November 30th, 2006 at 6:38 pm Said:

    Savannah-

    Good names of the caracters.

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  19. mack period 3, on November 30th, 2006 at 6:45 pm Said:

    Stephanie-

    I liked your “hook”.It was very interesting how you used CSI.

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  20. mack period 3, on November 30th, 2006 at 6:49 pm Said:

    Cassie-

    I liked your wording(example: eggsassinated).I thought the interveiw was great, nice detail in it.

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  21. lesliemaus, on November 30th, 2006 at 10:22 pm Said:

    Hey guys: If you’re reading this, you’ve already impressed me! But the deal is, to get any credit, you have to give SPECIFIC FEEDBACK regarding some aspect of the writer’s essay. Shane and Tori if you want your points to count you’ll go back and submit another! Also, Shane and Tori, you haven’t submitted your essay correctly. Shane, I think you need to save your essay as a .doc and Tori, you need to send yours as an attachment! Thanks. Matt O’Brien, yours has to have final edit and therefore cannot be published. But you are welcome to submit your revised copy or simply comment on others essays.
    Mack, great observation about the natural sounding names of the reporters and newscasters! That’s impressive! And Cassie’s paper literally cracked me up, as does Laura’s! Teagan, everyone says yours is hilarious and I have to agree: it is! Laura, is your comment, #14, directed toward Stephanie? ‘Cause I need to know to whom you are talking!
    Oh, one other thing: CAPITALIZE THE IMPORTANT WORDS IN TITLES!
    I’m so proud of you guys! Keep ROCKING! You guys are the ones that will lead!

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  22. Marina, on December 1st, 2006 at 8:45 am Said:

    Stephanie,
    I thought that was very creative that you put in the CSI team. Great Job!!!!

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  23. Marina, on December 1st, 2006 at 8:46 am Said:

    Teagan, your story was so creative with the “yolks” that is exactly what i did.

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  24. Marina, on December 1st, 2006 at 8:47 am Said:

    Cassie I loved yours. it was hilarious.

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  25. lesliemaus, on December 1st, 2006 at 3:43 pm Said:

    Marina, which part of Cassie’s story did you find amusing? Remember, to get the extra credit points, you have to be SUPER SPECIFIC!

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  26. Marina Paul, on December 5th, 2006 at 11:01 pm Said:

    Cassie, I absolutely loved your title it is so creative

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  27. Lo, on December 6th, 2006 at 10:11 am Said:

    Savannah,
    Catchy title! I liked all of the funny names you used like: K.E.G.G. news, Shelly and Egber. They were all very creative and it tells the reader that you really put time in your work!
    -Lo P.5-

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  28. Lo, on December 6th, 2006 at 10:48 am Said:

    Steph,
    I love your story. It’s very suspenseful when Humpty first turns around to look behind him, as he was standing on the wall, and sees nothing. It’s also creative how you made Boby and Ms.Parkington seem so realistic by the way they speak and act. Last I liked how you tied up the end by telling us that Freddie was Humpty’s “rival.” It left me unquestioning.
    -Lo P.5-

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  29. Lo, on December 6th, 2006 at 11:15 am Said:

    Cassie,
    Great words! They almost all relate to eggs! Some of my favorite ones are: eggsassinated, sunny-side, eggciting, and how freshly finaly got “shipped” to jail. You clearly show a lot of detail in your story, and it really lets the reader get into it. I also like the way you put in commercial breaks to let the reader know this is a real news story.

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  30. E.J. Per.3, on December 6th, 2006 at 8:38 pm Said:

    Dear Savannah,
    I thought your story was GREAT! I liked how you used clever and punny jokes, like he was living a scrambbled life.

    Sincerely,
    E.J.

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  31. Avery, on December 11th, 2006 at 3:41 pm Said:

    Gaby! I Loved your story. It was really unique how you used teh adjetives like cracked, fried, yolked, and rotten. It made the story more enjoyable! When I read your story I just didnt want to stop reading! It sounded like you were a real news reporter and this incident had really happened. It is so creative!

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  32. Avery, on December 11th, 2006 at 3:52 pm Said:

    Teagan, Your story was funny! I loved reading how nobody put Humpty back together and then there was breaking news that they had. I liked it how you had the idea for Humpty to be put back together by super glue! Great ideas!

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  33. shannon, on December 11th, 2006 at 8:57 pm Said:

    stephanie,your story was really realistic,and descriptive.

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  34. april, on December 13th, 2006 at 9:59 pm Said:

    Dear Cassie,

    Your story was great! :-) It was awesome. U are very creative.

    From: April Carlson

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  35. april, on December 13th, 2006 at 10:02 pm Said:

    dear teagan,

    The punns U chose are very funny. :-) 2 thumbs up. Great job! :-)

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  36. laura otsu, on December 18th, 2006 at 5:54 pm Said:

    regarding to whom i was reading for number fourteen, i think it is stephanies. sorry for getting back so late

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  37. Keynon Jackson, on February 12th, 2007 at 4:36 pm Said:

    There is a pie man, named bob the builder and he was super hero but he would always get half eaten but then regenerate back to normal.

    p.s. I like pieeee

    From: Keynon jackson

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  38. Kevin P, on November 1st, 2007 at 8:11 pm Said:

    nice stories.

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  39. Kate Period 6, on February 25th, 2008 at 5:35 pm Said:

    I read one of them and they did a good job.

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